January 15, 2011

Bear Jail

Ha, man... 


Bear is being brought into cells


Warden drops him in


MCU to bear on ground


Cuts out to warden leaving


Bear moves to corner


MCU to bear in corner sad


Bear looks up


Moves screen left


Cuts out to bear ending at bars


Bear looks out at nurse


Figures the lock is how you get out


Cuts back out, nurse in bear cell


Cuts to Bear on Couch


CU to bear looking


Eye-line action to key


Cuts out to nurse giving bear something


Cuts back to keys, bear takes keys


Nurse is like omg, bear walks off



cuts out to bear running off


ends at door


Cuts to nurse pressing a button (how do we know? we don't, bad storyboarding right here)


Cut back to bear opening door (no establishing shot so we dunno, wth is happening; moar bad storyboarding)


Bear running from stick figures (they're really guards and this is supposed to be climax which all takes place in just one short shot; bad)

The thing ends with the bear grabbing a water fountain by a window and throwing it out the window like Cuckoo's Nest; I threw it out though because when I pitched it I realized how dumb the whole thing was. The beginning (also thrown out) was even worse because it had nothing to do with what the rest of the story was about.

Blarg

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