Another terrible storyboard, this time, the protagonist does nothing but want!
Bear looking through bars
Cuts to him looking through bars
OTS with a tree silhouette in distance
Cuts close, it's a beehive
Cuts back, bear wants
Looks back (hears something)
Cuts out, shadow approaching
Zooms out, it's the guard (cheap prop: it's christmas)
Camera drops following cop to meet bear looking at keys
Cuts OTS, guard opening
Guard opening, has pancakes
Cuts to bear, guard in the distance
Cuts to his pancakes on hand
CU to bear
Top down, guard throws pancake platter
Camera drops to bear with pancakes in hand
Camera tilts up
Tilts up
Bear head tilts up
Expression change on CU
Cuts POV of pancakes
Bear wants
Cuts out to bear looking with bars
CU bear for expression change
Cuts to early shot with tree in silhouette
Beehive
Zooms in with honey dripping
MCU to bear with pancakes
OTS, guard approach (note cheap santa prop)
Hands extends with something
Bear snout FG, guard hands him present (honey)
Guard squeezes out honey
Bear eats pancake
Everything went better than expected
So, why is this bad? Hm...it was supposed to be centered around a christmas present, the only indication was that cheap santa hat. Maybe some snow outside may have helped, maybe a reef or two? Biggest problem, the bear does nothing to get the honey, it's literally handed to him. There wasn't really even a climax? Thinking about it, the story goes from the first act, skips everything between, and just goes to resolution; the button
Story is hard.
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